Catch it
25/3/24
For the past few weeks we have been writing a recount of a group of merecats running after a yummy pomegranate.
The inserting the thing into a peer buddy template and set it as a draft. Next we gave feed back on your buddy’s eight paragraphs. Then we took our buddy’s feed back to use to create a final draft to post on you blog.
Here is my final draft:
It was a dimly lit barrow day in the Savannah Oasis ( the sun was scorching hot ). When I emerged from my slumber I struggled to keep my eyes open ; while I stretched and yawned. I tumble down my brothers and sisters sleeping pile. I then made my way outside to check for predators.
I soon spotted a remarkable pomegranate sitting there in loneliness. Me, my brothers and sisters all got a turn to see the glory that it may give us and we got to touch it… Soon we all raced to our barrow because we heard the sound of predators.
We were all in shock! There was a curl vulture really to do some mischief, misconduct and misbehaving stuff. For a few minutes it was glancing at us wondering what we were doing. When we all stared at the pomegranate as fast as we can but the
Vulture was able to see and then he got it! He fingered out and knew that we were hoping that he wouldn’t steal the fruit! Then he snatched the fruit and started to fly away!
The next thing we did was chase him down! I hung onto the
vultures legs and held on tight then BUMP! I fell off, ran back again and jumped onto the vulture’s legs again! This time I held
on even tighter. I looked at the fruit the vulture was holding on to. I hugged the fruit happily then my siblings came on and held onto my feet then my other siblings held on as tight as they could. Next we got filled into the air
We started to fall at lightning speed! Then we looked up and the vulture was very frustrated! So we all started to pass the pomegranate around so the vulture had no chance to grab it. Soon we were rolling in the air because he went diving as fast as he could! Soon he caught the fruit.
Then the vulture looked back and giggled and then Boom! He crashed into the rocky cliff. We all stood in silence while the vulture died. Then all of our eyes went to the flying pomegranate, It was like a flying saucer.
Soon we caught it and then started to run in slow mo like we won a firing victory, but we were just dreaming. Me and my brother sisters were all telling him to kick it like one million times. Soon we continued to celebrate our victory until…
My brother finally kicked the shiny fruit in the air. It was like the king of the burning Savannah. It flies through the flaming hot air at high speed. We were playing a game of rugby tag! The fruit went through two trees that were shaped like a rugby post and then a goal! Then we all heard the sound of disappointment because it went Splat! Then End 😀👍

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